[Grammar] After saying those words

Nikitus

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Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"After saying those words the hobo took his backpack and left before the atonic look of his friernd."
 

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And remember to add a comma after "those words".
 

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Dear Piscean and emrs2d2:

First of all, thanks for your help.

Here are the corrections:


"
After saying those words, the hobo took his backpack and went away. His friend was surprised at what he heard."

Thanks.

 

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Dear Piscean and emrs2d2:

Thanks for your help.

Here is the revision.


"
After saying those words, the hobo took his backpack and went away. His friend was surprised at what he heard."




You don't need "First" if there is no second.
 

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Consider:

After saying those words, the hobo picked up his backpack and left.

Or:

After saying those words, the hobo put on his backpack and left.
 
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