Alan looked at a thug

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Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentences?

Alan looked at a thug who glared at him with his dark eyes. With his massive bold head and his flaring nostrils he reminded him of an oxen. A vein pulsated on his temple. Alan thought that if the thug attacked him, the only way to stop him was to break his nose.
 

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Alan looked at a thug, who glared at him with his dark eyes. With his massive bald head and his flaring nostrils, he reminded him of an ox. [STRIKE]en.[/STRIKE] A vein pulsated on his (right/left) temple. Alan thought that if the thug attacked him, the only way to stop him [STRIKE]was[/STRIKE] would be to [STRIKE]break[/STRIKE] smash his nose.
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Alan was probably looking at a specific thug who has been mentioned previously in the narrative. As such, he looked at the thug.

Note that oxen is the plural of "ox".
 

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"break his nose" is fine in BrE. It involves actually breaking the bone(s) in the nose. You could, probably, smash someone on the nose without breaking their nose.
 

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"break his nose" is fine in BrE. It involves actually breaking the bone(s) in the nose. You could, probably, smash someone on the nose without breaking their nose.

It's fine in AmE, too. There's no bone in your nose, though; it refers to breaking the cartilage that provides much of your nose's shape.
 
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