an umbrella

[AirbusA321]

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In most countries, people would consider you gay for carrying an umbrella for sun protection as a male. Not so in Manila, where it's seen as normal behaviour.

 

[SoothingDave]

It's better to say that it would be considered "effeminate," than "gay."

 

[emsr2d2]

In the 21st century, most people don't think that men are gay based on their behaviour, nor do they care whether other people are gay.

 

[Raymott]

"In the 21st century, most people don't think that men are gay based on their behaviour ..."

There are some behaviours which tend to be indicative, such as having sex with other men.

 

[emsr2d2]

There are some behaviours which tend to be indicative, such as having sex with other men.

Ha ha! Fair point. I was thinking more along the lines of behaviour you're likely to see people exhibiting in public! Attitudes are, thankfully, changing. Not so long ago, a man using moisturiser would have been assumed to be gay. Nowadays, most people realise that's nonsense.

 

[Lynxear]

Are these sentences good as they stand or do i have to improve them?

In most countries, people would consider you gay for carrying an umbrella for sun protection as a male. Not so in Manila, where it's seen as normal behaviour.

I won't comment on the social consequences of your sentence, but rather your sentence itself.

I would remove the first comma.

In most countries people would consider (that) you (are) gay, for....

Personally I would add those bracketed implied words for clarity.

I would change "as a male" to "if you are male". "You" could be female if you write the sentence your way... you don't know. They could just be carrying the umbrella in a male fashion. I would also place this phrase in the front of the sentence.

This is how I would write the sentence.


If you are male, in most countries people would consider that you are gay for carrying an umbrella for sun protection.