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thomas615

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Teacher, are there errors in these sentences? Thank you

I would like to plan a trip to Manila in June of this year to visit my aged aunt who is 85 years old and also my good friends as I have not seen them for about four years. My trip dates are from June 10 to 21.
 

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They're OK.
 

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The first sentence needs a comma after 'aunt' and one after 'old'. I would also have a comma after 'friends'.
 

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I don't think you need to say "aged" and "who is 85 years old".

Although your sentences were OK, they could be tidied up and shortened a little. Here is my suggestion:

I would like to go to Manila in June this year to visit my 85-year-old aunt, and some good friends who I have not seen for four years. My planned trip dates are June 10th to 21st.
 

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A better title, thomas, would have been I would like to go to Manila.

Extract from the Posting Guidelines:

'Thread titles should include all or part of the word/phrase being discussed.'

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