Are there too many "the"s?

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finefeeling

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Dear language experts,

I wrote the following sentence, but I'm not very happy with all the "the"s in it. Are there too many of them?

On the night of the event, the chairman of the board, the school principal, the seniors, the teachers and the students, again, welcomed Mr. Lin heartily.
 

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Dear language experts,

I wrote the following sentence, but I'm not very happy with all the "the"s in it. Are there too many of them?

On the night of the event, the chairman of the board, the school principal, the seniors, the teachers and the students, again, welcomed Mr. Lin heartily.
There aren't too many "the"s, but there are too many commas. I would omit the comma after "event", and I would definitely omit the commas before and after "again".
 

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Dear language experts,

I wrote the following sentence, but I'm not very happy with all the "the"s in it. Are there too many of them?

On the night of the event, the chairman of the board, the school principal, the seniors, the teachers and the students, again, welcomed Mr. Lin heartily.


On the night of the event, the Board Chairman,School Principal,Seniors, Teachers and the students, again, welcomed Mr. Lin heartily.[/quote]

Sounds better

Stilo
 

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Angelika not sure, they were Finefeeling's words. I was just concerned adjusting the 'the's' didn't really notice that!
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Presumably Mr. Lin was initially welcomed earlier.
 

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Thank you very much for the replies!

Mr. Lin had visited the school the year before the activity I am writing about, so I inserted "again," though.
 
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