As Clive stepped out of the taxi

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

As Clive stepped out of the taxi onto the pavement, a shot rang out. He ducked down and looked up and down the empty street, on which there was no movement but for the wind blowing leaves and pieces of paper.
 

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

As Clive stepped out of the taxi onto the pavement, a shot rang out. He ducked [STRIKE]down[/STRIKE] and looked up and down the empty street, on which there was no movement but for leaves and pieces of paper being blown [around] by the wind. [STRIKE]blowing leaves and pieces of paper.[/STRIKE]

See above. One can only "duck" in one direction so there's no need to use "duck down" (which is also a filling for pillows and duvets!) Using just "duck" removes the repetition of the word "down".

The movement is not of the wind, it's of the leaves and bits of paper.
 
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