As David was dancing with

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I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct.

As David was dancing with a leggy blonde on a dancing floor, he often blinked at his friends sitting nearby, who gave him the thumbs up.
 

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It's OK. Blinking at people is weird, especially if you do it a lot. Did you mean he winked?
 

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Yes. I meant he winked. I don't understand how I mixed up "wink" with "blink".
 

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I'd omit 'on a dancing floor'. It seems a bit unnecessary and you've already used 'dancing'. In any case, we say 'a dance floor'.
 

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I'd start with "While" and probably follow it with "David danced".
 
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