As the crowds were leaving

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

As the crowds were leaving nightclubs, discos and restaurants in the early hours of the morning, people stared in disbelief as a barefoot man in a white pyjamas led a white cow through the street. He puffed on his cigarette, hitting her slightly with a stick, while the cow wagged her tail jauntily. The couple silently disappeared into the night. Those who later told their friends what they had seen was accused of drinking too much and mixing their drinks.
 

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The strikethrough line doesn't show up very well on the forum so I will simply tell you this - remove "a" before "white pyjamas".
There is ambiguity in sentence 2. It sounds as if "her" refers to "his cigarette". Try "He puffed on his cigarette, hitting the cow slightly with a stick while she jauntily wagged her tail". (Do cows really wag their tails?)
Use "the pair", not "the couple". The latter suggests two people who are romantically connected.
I'd use "disappeared silently".
With "Those" in the final sentence, you need "were accused".
 

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I don't know if cows wag their tails. I have seen them moving their tails, but I didn't know which word to use to describe that movement, so I used "wag".
 

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I think I've heard "flicking" used for cows' tails.
 

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They swish their tails to brush off irritating flies from their nether regions.

I've never heard of cows wagging their tails jauntily like happy dogs do.
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I don't know if cows wag their tails. I have seen them moving their tails, but I didn't know which word to use to describe that movement, so I used "wag".

Cows flick their tails to disturb flies. They don't do it to display happiness.
 

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Which nightclubs, discos and restaurants were the crowds leaving? The opening is odd without context.
 

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I don't know if cows wag their tails. I have seen them moving their tails, but I didn't know which word to use to describe that movement, so I used "wag".

Flick is good. They also swish them.
 
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