As the president's car passed through the village

Status
Not open for further replies.

Bassim

VIP Member
Joined
Mar 1, 2008
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Bosnian
Home Country
Bosnia Herzegovina
Current Location
Sweden
Please would you help me and correct the mistakes in my sentences. I am aware that my second sentence does not sound natural, but I am unable to correct it myself.

As the president's car passed through the village, it caught fire. An old woman, sitting on her porch, said ominously, "Who comes with fire usually burns up in fire."
 
J

J&K Tutoring

Guest
Actually, your second sentence is 'correct', though it's not likely (IMHO) a native speaker would put it quite that way. It's more 'poetical' to have the prepositions match in some way: "Who comes with fire usually burns up with fire." ​sounds more probable to me.
 

Lynxear

Member
Joined
Dec 20, 2007
Member Type
Retired English Teacher
Native Language
English
Home Country
Canada
Current Location
Canada
I might try this for the ending:

....."He, who comes with fire, usually burns in fire."

I don't think "up" is really necessary.
 

Tdol

Editor, UsingEnglish.com
Staff member
Joined
Nov 13, 2002
Member Type
Native Language
British English
Home Country
UK
Current Location
Japan
You could try something more dramatic: Who brings fire burns.
 

Tdol

Editor, UsingEnglish.com
Staff member
Joined
Nov 13, 2002
Member Type
Native Language
British English
Home Country
UK
Current Location
Japan
....."He, who comes with fire, usually burns in fire."

I would treat that as a restrictive/defining relative clause and leave the commas out.
 
Status
Not open for further replies.
Top