Bea saw her husband carrying a dead mouse

[Bassim]

I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Bea saw her husband carrying a dead mouse by the tail between his thumb and his index finger, and she fainted. When she came round, he was watching TV and munching peanuts, as if nothing extraordinary had happened. "You missed the first ten minutes of the film. I don't now how you'll be able to follow the rest," he said, without giving her a glance.

 

[GoesStation]

They're OK.

 

[emsr2d2]

I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Bea saw her husband carrying a dead mouse by the tail between his thumb and his index finger, and she fainted. When she came round, he was watching TV and munching peanuts, as if nothing extraordinary had happened. "You missed the first ten minutes of the film. I don't know how you'll be able to to follow the rest," he said, without giving her a glance.

See above.

 

[Rover_KE]

Delete one of the tos.

 

[GoesStation]

I said they're OK but on second reading, I see an extra comma. Can you find it?

 

[Bassim]

I am not sure if I can find it. Could it be after "peanuts."

 

[emsr2d2]

Yes, that's the one. I missed that on first reading.