Bea stared at herself in the mirror

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Bea stared at herself in the mirror and was disappointed by her looks. More wrinkles covered her face, while dark rings hung under her tired eyes. The night shift was putting years on her. She had to find another job or she risked of becoming prematurely old.
 

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Bea stared at herself in the mirror and was disappointed by/with [STRIKE]her looks[/STRIKE] what she saw. More (more than what?) wrinkles covered her face, while dark rings hung under her tired eyes. The night shift was putting years on her. She had to find another job or she risked [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] becoming prematurely old.

See above.
 

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Would it be OK if I write this:

More wrinkles than ever covered her face..
 

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