Because of his aggressiveness and impulsiveness

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I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

Because of his aggressiveness and impulsiveness, Phil runs into all kinds of troubles.
 
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Bassim said:
I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

Because of his aggressiveness and impulsiveness, Phil runs into all kinds of [STRIKE]troubles[/STRIKE] trouble.
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See above.
 
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It's OK. Once again, I think it can be improved by rephrasing to avoid commas. [EDIT] I missed the superfluous S that ems pointed out.
 
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Here is another version.

Phil runs into all kinds of trouble because of his aggressiveness and impulsiveness.
 
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That's better. This version puts another subject first: His aggressiveness and impulsiveness get Phil into all kinds of trouble.
 
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Or Phil's aggressiveness and impulsiveness get him into all kinds of trouble.
 
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