Bob and his friends would spend summers by the river

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Bob and his friends would spend summers by the river. They would put a crate full of beer into the river and wait until it cooled. Then they would sit in the shade of willow trees, sip their beer and play cards for hours.
 

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I'd move their from the last sentence to the first, before the word summers. I'd also add an Oxford comma after "beer" but many writers and editors wouldn't. Otherwise it's fine.
 

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They're OK but I find the repetitive use of "would" a bit annoying. I suggest changing at least one of them to "used to".
 
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