Bob lived a cloistered life

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I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Bob lived a cloistered life until he came to Oxford for his studies. There, he underwent a transformation, went to parties, indulged in binge drinking, and chased women without any inhibitions.
 

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Bob lived a cloistered life until he [STRIKE]came[/STRIKE] went to Oxford for his studies. There, he underwent a transformation, [STRIKE]went[/STRIKE] started going to parties, indulged in binge drinking, and chased women without any inhibitions.
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If the writer is in Oxford or the rest of the piece is clearly based in Oxford, you could use "came" in the first sentence. However, if you do, you'll need to change "There" to "Here" at the start of the second sentence.

I find the end ambiguous. Who had no inhibitions - Bob or the women he chased?
 

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I noticed I often make the mistakes with "come" and "go" in similar sentences. I did not know I should use "here" with "came" And regarding "without inhibitions" it was Bob. Should I end my sentence like this:
"...and without any inhibitions chased women."
 

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To be honest, I don't really like any mention of inhibitions when it comes to this topic. You could say that he "shamelessly chased [lots of] women".
 

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"Shamelessly" is the word I needed in the above sentence, but unfortunately I could not remember it at the moment of writing, although I have heard it many times. I thought about which word to use and could not remember a better phrase than "without any inhibitions" which, I understand does not convey the exact meaning I wanted to say.
 
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