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[MikeNewYork]

Dear Teachers,

could you please check the following for mistakes for me


(The ship is still being held by the authority and did not sail
from the port yet.

there still be some legal cases against the ship owner and
the lawers names that are taking on the case are :

AND I MENTIONED THIER NAMES


many thanks

In the first sentence, "authority" should be "authorities", at least in American English. The second issue of the first sentence is a matter of style more than grammar. You have a compound verb made up of "is being held" and "did (not) sail". From the standpoint of parallelism, that could be improved. One could add a subject to the second clause and/or a different conjunction.

The ship is still being held by the authorities; therefore, it did not sail
from the port yet.

There are some pending legal cases involving the ship owner. The names of the lawyers handling the case are:

 

[Tdol]

Mike, just deleted the original post because there were tweo, could you switch this answer to the other one? Sorry. Bad timing. ;-)
https://www.usingenglish.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=5465&highlight=

 

[Susie Smith]

Dear Teachers,

could you please check the following for mistakes for me


(The ship is still being held by the authority and did not sail
from the port yet.

there still be some legal cases against the ship owner and
the lawers names that are taking on the case are :

AND I MENTIONED THIER NAMES


many thanks

In the first sentence, "authority" should be "authorities", at least in American English. The second issue of the first sentence is a matter of style more than grammar. You have a compound verb made up of "is being held" and "did (not) sail". From the standpoint of parallelism, that could be improved. One could add a subject to the second clause and/or a different conjunction.

The ship is still being held by the authorities; therefore, it did not sail
from the port yet.

There are some pending legal cases involving the ship owner. The names of the lawyers handling the case are:

Shouldn't be "it has not sailed from the port yet"?

 

[MikeNewYork]

Mike, just deleted the original post because there were tweo, could you switch this answer to the other one? Sorry. Bad timing. ;-)
https://www.usingenglish.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=5465&highlight=

I copied it over there. I was wondering what happened to my post. I didn't see that there were two threads. :wink:

 

[Tdol]

;-)