Can someone help me to make this read better

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elaine.hannah

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I am looking to return to work after a career break, in which I initially raised my daughter and subsequently cared for my unwell mum and now wish to find the right job.
 

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Maybe you can simplify. Here's a quick idea:

I have been out of the workforce to care for family needs, and now returning I hope to find a job that I can excel in.

If this is in a cover letter or a business interview I would try to be quick and precise with my wording.
 

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Welcome to the forums, Elaine.

Consider

I am looking to return to work after a career break, during which I initially raised my daughter and subsequently cared for my sick mother and now wish to find the right job.

Rover
 
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