Can someone tell me if my essay is on the right track?

[swap0]

I'm haven't done any essay writing in a long time (I was never good at writing to begin with actually) and I want to start writing again to prepare for graduate school. I went to the GRE website and download their Issue Topics and Argue Topics to start. I was wondering if anyone could read my essay to see if I it is on the right track? Please don't worry about my grammer since I didn't proof read my essay yet.
Please feel free to criticise how bad it is. Well, here is my essay..



[FONT=&#26032]"Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means putting old ideas together in new ways."[/FONT]

[FONT=&#26032]Revising my Essay.. please check back soon[/FONT]

 

[susiedqq]

I'm not sure what you want to know. You said you have not proof-read your work. There are grammatical errors and misspellings. Some of your sentences are worded in a confusing way.

I suggest that you go back and look at each paragraph and each line.

Does it have a main idea? Are there supporting sentences in the paragraph? Is there a conclusion statement at the end?

Do the paragraphs flow together in a logical order?

Does the last paragraph state your position and make a final statement?

(Learning to outline helps in writing essays.)