[General] Can you look at my letter.

[Ildus1988]

This is a letter to my future employee.
I want to ask him few questions. Can you fix it please.



Dear Mr. Garrett.
Hello Mr Garrett, how are you today? I'm XXXX, student from Kazan. I had an interview with you last week at Shalyapin hotel about vacancy in Almetevsk city. You said that will call me in a few days, maybe I missed your call? I called Igor’ today and he said its fine with. But he couldn’t tell me starting days. And ask me to contact with you.
I ‘d like to ask you couple of questions.
1.I’d like to know when I should to start work.
2.I had applied for a J1 visa before I knew about this job. And they already did all paper work. I’ll have an interview with VISA Officer in 28 of May. Could I request a confirmation that I get hired and will start work at __________please, so I could explain to officer about situation and cancel my Visa.
3.Or I already have all documents to go to USA and I already paid all fees. Maybe in XXX Company we have some opportunities with internship. In this case I could have a training in the Head office (or branch) of XXX for a few month. And in my view I could better understand main work keys of XXXX company workin in the head office and after coming back to my country I can contribute more to my job. I can use my J1 visa to internship.

Looking forward to hear from you soon.
Fatefully yours
Feel free to contact with me at XXXXX

 

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This is a letter to my future employee.
I want to ask him few questions. Can you fix it please.



Dear Mr. Garrett.
[STRIKE]Hello Mr Garrett, how are you today?[/STRIKE]
I'm XXXX, a student from Kazan. I had an interview with you last week at Shalyapin hotel about a vacancy in Almetevsk city. You said that [STRIKE]will[/STRIKE] you would call me in a few days[STRIKE], maybe I missed your call?[/STRIKE] but I have not heard from you. I called Igor today and he [STRIKE]said its fine with[/STRIKE] told me that everything was fine. [STRIKE]But he couldn’t tell me starting days. And ask me to contact with you.[/STRIKE] However, he could not tell me the start date and asked me to contact you direct.

[STRIKE]I ‘d[/STRIKE] I would like to ask you a couple of questions:

1. [STRIKE]I’d like to know when I should to[/STRIKE] When would you like me to start work?

2. I had already applied for a J1 visa before I knew about this job. [STRIKE]And they already did[/STRIKE] All the paperwork has been completed and [STRIKE]I’ll[/STRIKE] I am due to have an interview with the [STRIKE]VISA[/STRIKE] visa officer [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] on [STRIKE]28 of May[/STRIKE] 28/5/10. Could [STRIKE]I request a confirmation that I get hired and will start work at [/STRIKE] you please confirm my appointment with your company, so that I [STRIKE]could[/STRIKE] can explain the situation to the visa officer [STRIKE]about situation [/STRIKE] and cancel my visa application?

3. As an alternative, as [STRIKE]Or[/STRIKE] I already have all the documents to go to USA and have already paid all the fees, I am wondering if [STRIKE]Maybe in XXX[/STRIKE] your company [STRIKE]we[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]have[/STRIKE] has some internship opportunities [STRIKE]with internship[/STRIKE]. In [STRIKE]this[/STRIKE] that case I could [STRIKE]have a[/STRIKE] undergo training [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] at the Head office (or branch) of XXX for a few months. [STRIKE]And [/STRIKE] In my view, this would help me to [STRIKE]I could[/STRIKE] better understand the main work [STRIKE]keys[/STRIKE] areas of [STRIKE]XXXX[/STRIKE] the company [STRIKE]workin in the head office[/STRIKE] and, after coming back to my country, I would be able to contribute more to [STRIKE]my[/STRIKE] the job. I can use my J1 visa [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] for the internship.

I look[STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] forward to hearing from you soon. Please contact me at xxxxxxxxx

[STRIKE]Fatefully yours[/STRIKE]

[STRIKE]Feel free to contact with me at XXXXX[/STRIKE]

Yours sincerely

xxxxxxxxxx

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