Can you 'PLEASE' check my essay.

[jomo27]

Let's compare two countries, Japan and Indonesia. Japan is considered as developed country and Indonesia is developing country. In Japan, they have the good communication technologies such as internet, satellites, mobile-phones, television networking and so on. In almost all the schools in Japan, they have the access to the internet nicely and all the students from primary to higher secondary are using it very commonly. The internet can be used to browse sources or topics for the subjects in the school. Moreover, they can use it for searching new projects and tasks as well as emails and sharing documents. Unlike in Indonesia, developing country, only few schools have this chance to access to the internet freely and yet the connection is still bad. The impact of this problem is, the students have only limited chance to find other sources, or documents worldwide. In addition, the education in the developed countries is much better than in developing countries, because in developed countries they're well developed and equipped. But in the present time, in developing countries, they're trying to push up t use the ICTs.

However, most people in developing countries are feel feared when they're trying to use up-to-date technologies since they're not comfort with it. Like in Japan, people are trying to improve the technologies to the max, but in Indonesia, they're only rely on developed countries to be able to use the technolgies, they don't try making it by themself. In fact, in developing countries, the uses of ICTs are very low compared to developed countries. In developing countries, it would be no ICTs in small villages and towns. And only few in the cities. But In developed countries, even in small towns and villages, they do have the ICTs equipped nicely. And that's all the difference availabilty of ICTs in developed and developing countries. Furthermore, ICTs in developed and developing countries can be used for education, health, the environment, business, communications, etc.

 

[Anglika]

Let's compare two countries, Japan and Indonesia. Japan is considered as [as a/to be a] developed country and Indonesia is [as a] developing country. In Japan, they have the [there are] good communication technologies such as the internet, satellites, mobile phones, television networking and so on. In almost all the schools in Japan, they have access to the internet nicely [omit - unnecessary] and all the students from primary to higher secondary are using it very commonly. The internet can be used to browse sources or topics for the subjects in the school. Moreover, they can use it for searching new projects and tasks as well as e-mails and sharing documents. Unlike in [Whereas in] Indonesia, a developing country, only a few schools have this chance to access to the internet freely and yet [omit - unnecessary]the connection is still bad. The impact of this problem is, [As a result/Therefore] Indonesian students have only limited chances to find other sources or documents worldwide. In addition, education in the developed countries is much better than in developing countries, because in developed countries they're [the schools are] well developed and equipped. But in the present time, [omit - unnecessary] In developing countries, they're trying to push up t use the ICTs. the use of ICTs is still being increased.

However, most people in developing countries are feel feared [fearful/frightened] when they're trying to use up-to-date technologies since they're not comfortable with them. In Japan, people are trying to improve the technologies to the maximum level, but in Indonesia, they rely on technology from developed countries. to be able to use the technolgies, they don't try making it by themself.[delete] In fact, in developing countries, the uses of ICTs are very low compared to developed countries. In developing countries, it would be no ICTs in small villages and towns. And only few in the cities. But In developed countries, even in small towns and villages, they do have the ICTs equipped nicely. And that's all the difference availabilty of ICTs in developed and developing countries.Repeats what you have already said.

Furthermore, ICTs in developed and developing countries can be used for education, health, the environment, business, communications, etc. Try to develop this theme more.

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