can you please clear this memo

[sanjfer]

To: All employees,

It has been observed that some employees are habitual in requesting cash advance every month. This practice will not be entertained anymore. The cash advance will be paid to the employee only on emergency financial circumstances.

For your information and strict compliance.

 

[emsr2d2]

To: All employees ​(no comma here)

It has been [STRIKE]observed[/STRIKE] noticed that some employees are habitually [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] requesting a cash advance. [STRIKE]every month.[/STRIKE] This practice will [STRIKE]not[/STRIKE] no longer be entertained/permitted. [STRIKE]anymore.[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]The[/STRIKE] Cash advances will be paid to [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] employees only [STRIKE]on[/STRIKE] in an emergency. [STRIKE]financial circumstances.[/STRIKE]

[STRIKE]For your information and strict compliance.[/STRIKE]

See above.

 

[tedmc]

Would the plural "cash advances" in the first sentence be better since we are talking about employees?