can you please correct this letter?

[francycham]

I want to send a memo to all staff saying there will be electricity failure in our office one day so take off that day and work on Saturday to compensate this off day- please see below and correct it.

Dear All,

We have received an electricity shout down notice from the electricity board informing the electricity supply in our office will be interrupted on Thursday 3/1/2010 between 7am to 3pm. Hence, all are advised to take off on Thursday and to work full day on Saturday, our regular off day to compensate this off day.

 

[emsr2d2]

I want to send a memo to all staff saying there will be electricity failure in our office one day so take off that day and work on Saturday to compensate this off day- please see below and correct it.

Dear All,

We have received an electricity shout down notice from the electricity board informing the electricity supply in our office will be interrupted on Thursday 3/1/2010 between 7am to 3pm. Hence, all are advised to take off on Thursday and to work full day on Saturday, our regular off day to compensate this off day.

We have received notice from the electricity supplier that there will be an interruption to the office electricity supply on Thursday 3/1/2010 from 7am to 3pm.
Consequently, all staff are requested to take 3/1/10 off, and work a full day on Saturday 5/1/10 to compensate.