Check the tense

[Adam Cruge]

I wish I was a Selfish Giant;then winter prevailed on my house only all year long and I would not have to suffer from the heat of the summer.


Check the underlined part. Is it ok?

 

[Tdol]

I would say 'then winter would prevail' and remove 'only'.

 

[Adam Cruge]

Ok, but what about the underlined part? is the tense ok and compatible with the rest of the sentence.

 

[emsr2d2]

The underlined part will be compatible with the rest of the sentence if you make TDol's suggested changes.

 

[Adam Cruge]

Ok thank you...

 

[bhaisahab]

I would suggest "I wish I were a selfish giant..."

 

[Raymott]

I would question a person's ability to change the climate merely by being a giant.

 

[Adam Cruge]

This is in connection with the fairy tale "The selfish giant" by Oscar Wilde. I wrote the sentence to make a joke, not a serious one.

 

[Tdol]

They might act as a windbreak.