# Clear and fine?

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#### NewHope

##### Senior Member
If the sentence below is not clear and fine, please improve it.

The number of consenters, who stand for the last two points about the vehicles with low-tech parameters, are less than that of objectors.

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#### Casiopea

##### VIP Member
NewHope said:
If the sentence below is not clear and fine, please improve it.

The number of consenters, who stand for the last two points about the vehicles with low-tech parameters, are less than that of objectors.

I'm confused. :? Id on't get the 'who stand for the last two points about the....' part.

The number of people who consented is less than the number of people who objected.

All the best,

#### NewHope

##### Senior Member
Hi Casiopea,

who stand for the last two points about the ... = who agreed the last two points about the ...

"The last two points":
If there are five point(view)s, then "the last two points" refers to "the fourth point and the fifth point".

Have you got "vehicles with low-tech parameters".

The sentence "The number of people who consented is less than the number of people who objected" is okay. But what they consented?

#### Casiopea

##### VIP Member
NewHope said:
The sentence "The number of people who consented is less than the number of people who objected" is okay. But what they consented?

That's my question, too.
I don't understand what they agreed to exactly.

#### NewHope

##### Senior Member
Regarding "vehicles with low-tech parameters".

Some machines are the products of high-tech, for example: a computer is a prodct of high-tech, so the computer has its high-tech parameters. Right?

But a toy is just a low-tech product, so the toy has its low-tech parameters.

Some vehicles are the products with low-tech parameters.

Okay, now do you feel the original sentence is clear?

===>>>" The number of consenters, who stand for the last two points about the vehicles with low-tech parameters, are less than that of objectors. "

#### Casiopea

##### VIP Member
NewHope said:
"The number of consenters, who stand for the last two points about the vehicles with low-tech parameters, are less than that of objectors. "

The number of people who consented/agreed to the last two points on (i.e., regarding) vehicles with low-tech parameters is less than the number of people who objected/disagreed.

All the best,

#### NewHope

##### Senior Member
Good.

But it seems a bit too long.

#### Casiopea

##### VIP Member
NewHope said:
Good.

But it seems a bit too long.

I have faith in you. :up:

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