Clive saw in the street his old love Maria

[Bassim]

Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentence. I am not sure if my sentence sounds natural. Is it correct to say "old love", or should it be "old flame"?

Clive saw in the street his old love Maria from university days, and he cast his mind when they sat by the river promising everlasting love to each other.

 

[emsr2d2]

Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentence. I am not sure if my sentence sounds natural. Is it correct to say "old love", or should it be "old flame"?

[STRIKE]Clive saw[/STRIKE] In the street, Clive saw Maria, [STRIKE]his[/STRIKE] an old [STRIKE]love[/STRIKE] flame [STRIKE]Maria[/STRIKE] from ​his university days, and he cast his mind back to when they sat by the river promising everlasting love to each other.

See above.

 

[teechar]

Would you please correct the mistakes in my sentence?

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