Clive stood on the edge of the jetty

Bassim

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Are my sentences grammatically correct?

Clive stood on the edge of the jetty, telling his friends he was going to make a great jump, but then he bellyflopped. He came out of the water with the red marks on his stomach and his face crimson with shame, and had to hear his friends jeers and taunts.
 

Charlie Bernstein

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Are my sentences grammatically correct?

Clive stood on the edge of the jetty, telling his friends he was going to make a great dive, but then he bellyflopped. He came out of the water with (delete the) red marks on his stomach and his face crimson with shame (no comma) and had to hear his friends' jeers and taunts.

Yes.
 
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