Company prepared to be sold- Please, proofread the text.

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Sandersru

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Most of all I’m willing to know whether the last sentence is correct? But I will appreciate if your proofread the whole text.
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The company has reduced the sated capital by 6.3% to 164.4 million rubles. The change has been approved by the company’s shareholders at a special meeting on March 6. Analysts can’t exclude that doing so shareholders may getting ready the company to be sold.
Or it’s better to say : Analysts can’t exclude that by doing so the shareholders may getting the company ready for selling.
 
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I'm afraid neither of your variations are correct.

Maybe

Analysts cannot exclude that by doing so the shareholders may be preparing the company for sale.

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Analysts can’t exclude that doing so shareholders may getting ready the company to be sold.

Seems very akward . . . "can't exclude"?

How about

According to Analysts, the change may indicate the company is positioning itself to be sold.
 

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Thanks everybody for your input and help.

susiedqq is it possible to omit the “shareholders”? I guess your variation looks very formal, that’s what it should be.


How about the first two sentences, are they correct and formal?
1.The company has reduced the sated capital by 6.3% to 164.4 million rubles. 2.The change has been approved by the company’s shareholders at a special meeting on March 6.
 

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Your sentences are clear.
Keep the word shareholders in sentence 2.
"Shareholder" is not necessary in sentence 3.
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The change has been approved by the company’s shareholders at a special meeting on March 6.
Sorry, I'm not a native speaker, but I thought it should be
The change was approved by the company’s shareholders at a special meeting on March 6.
Or am I wrong?
 

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Good catch!

Because of the date (March 6) the verb should be "was approved" or "had been approved" . . .
 

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The company has reduced the sated capital by 6.3% to 164.4 million rubles. The change has been approved by the company’s shareholders at a special meeting on March 6. Analysts can’t exclude that doing so shareholders may getting ready the company to be sold.
The company has reduced the stated capital by 6.3% to 164.4 million rubles. The change was approved by the company's shareholders at a special meeting on March 6. Analysts can't exclude the possibility that the action was taken to get the company ready to be sold.
You could also say:
to get the company ready for sale.
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