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Hi there,

Is it correct?
If young people always play computer games, they may gradually not be willing to socialise with others. This will affect their growth badly because teenagers need to develop social and communication skills for their future lives when they are young.

Thanks
pete

 

[louhevly]

Hi there,

Is it correct?
If young people always play computer games, they may gradually not be willing to socialise with others. This will affect their growth badly because teenagers need to develop social and communication skills for their future lives when they are young.

Thanks
pete

Almost. I'd make it:

If young people always play computer games, they may gradually become unwilling to socialise with others. This will affect their growth negatively because, when they are young, teenagers need to develop social and communication skills for their future lives.

You don't want to end your sentence "...for their future lives when they are young" because that makes it sound as if they will be young in their future lives.

 

[baqarah131]

Here's what I'd say. I suggest you compare the two versions and see what you think.

Not that my social skills are the greatest.
edward

If young people spend too much time playing computer games, they may gradually lose interest in spending time with others. This will have a negative effect because teenagers need to develop their social skills and their ability to communicate.

Hi there,

Is it correct?
If young people always play computer games, they may gradually not be willing to socialise with others. This will affect their growth badly because teenagers need to develop social and communication skills for their future lives when they are young.


Thanks
pete