consuming one from the inside

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brend10

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Could you please help me to correct the following lines;

Her panic which I couldn’t understand why and your attitude not to speak with me were all became worms that were consuming me from the inside.


If we are talking about the worms which one is correct to use consuming... gnawing or corrading or any other alternatives?
 

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Could you please help me to correct the following lines;

Her panic which I couldn’t understand why and your attitude not to speak with me were all became worms that were consuming me from the inside.


If we are talking about the worms which one is correct to use consuming... gnawing or corrading or any other alternatives?

What does <corrading> mean, Brend? Do you mean <corroding>?

You might need some commas here and might I suggest the deletion of 'why'. Is this what you want to say?

Her panic, which I couldn’t understand, and your attitude which led you to not speak with me, were all worms that were consuming me from the inside.
 

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thanks riverkid

yes.. that is what I wanted to say...

it is not corrading... I looked at again the word it corrode... sorry...

Can worms corrode bits and pieces inside the bones-organs....
 

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Worms can't corrode you. Your body will become corroded. Worms will consume the corroded body.

In your sentence, consume is a good term to use.
 

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How about:

Her panic, which I couldn’t understand the reason, and your attitude not to speak with me upset my stomach. (or upset me greatly)

 

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thanks susie....

But I have to use something for worms

what about ''gnawing''

Can I also use that word for worms...

........... were all worms that were gnawing me from the inside.
 

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thanks to all

It's four o'clock in the morning in here and I finally finished the homework and
I'm dying to sleep. ( I wonder If there is an expression like this in English?)
 

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Hey brend,

If you would like to keep your idea of the worms (very poetic!), I would suggest using a phrase like 'eating away at'.

"Her panic, which I couldn’t understand, and your attitude which led you to not speak with me, were all worms that were eating away at me from the inside."

Just a thought!

Ryan
 

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Thanks Ryan...

I would prefer ''eating away at...'' instead of consuming...

Can you give me an example with ''gnawling'' ..

in which cases I can use this word...
 

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Thanks Ryan...

I would prefer ''eating away at...'' instead of consuming...

Can you give me an example with ''gnawling'' .. to gnaw - gnawing

in which cases I can use this word...

My feelings of distress gnawed away at my insides.
My feelings of distress were gnawing away at my insides
 
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