correct?

[Allen165]

Would you say this sentence is correct?

He's tried to set up another meeting with John on several occassions but has had no success in doing so.

Thanks.

 

[TheParser]

Would you say this sentence is correct?

He's tried to set up another meeting with John on several occassions but has had no success in doing so.

Thanks.

***NOT A TEACHER***

Good afternoon.

(1) Your sentence is very nice.

(2) May I just suggest a few changes, especially if you are going to write this in a formal letter.

(3) He has tried to arrange another meeting with John on several occasions, but he has been unsuccessful.

Thank you.