correcting grammer and structure!

[Recardo]

Hello Every one, i'm new to the "UsingEnglish.com" and i need to get
some help regarding the correction of a statement letter that i wrote
and i was wondering if i post that letter in here , weather you guys
can help me with the grammer corrections of it?

i'l be very please if you could

(I really need to correct bad grammer in this letter becasue it's a statement of choice for an official)

 

[Tdol]

Post it up. ;-)