Cover letter - would appreciate some feed :)

[asfaloth100]

Cover letter - would appreciate some feedback

Hey,

This is my first post here but I have read a few of the tips, that people have gotten from this forum and I hope that you are also willing to help me out a bit I am applying to a customer service job in the gaming industry, and would be happy if someone could give me some feedback on my cover letter, since I have never written one in english before. I have removed some of the details about the job, and put a description of it instead in [ ].


Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you to apply for the position of [name of the position] advertised on your website on the 29th of February 2008.

I found the job description to be very interesting, and I believe that I would be an ideal candidate for the following reasons.
I have worked within the field of customer service for more than 4 years. During this time I gained experience on how to communicate with people.
I had the responsibility for training and coaching employees, in addition to handling the most difficult customer inquiries. This makes me able to deliver messages in a professional way, and to fit them to individual persons if needed.

I have a lot of experience serving as a link between customers, employees and clients, as being the person who had all the answers, or knew how to get them, was a main part of my previous employment. I believe that my experience in handling flow of information, and making it suitable for the recipient, could be of great use in a position like this.

As a person I am very detail oriented and organized. I always set high standards for my work and I am not satisfied until those are achieved. I work well in a team, and I do not shy away from taking responsibility for any task at hand.

In addition to this gaming is a hobby of mine and has been so for years. I spend a lot of time browsing different game related forums and websites, and I have experience as a forum moderator. I am a big fan of [company name] products and a very active [name of a game] player.

I see this job as an opportunity to combine my passion for working with people with my gaming hobby, and I would very much like to take on the challenge.
I have included my resume for more information on my background.

Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon, and am available for an interview at whatever time is suitable for you. I can be contacted at the following number: [my phone number].

Yours faithfully,
[my name]

 

[Batfink]

Re: Cover letter - would appreciate some feedback

Hey,

This is my first post here but I have read a few of the tips, that people have gotten from this forum and I hope that you are also willing to help me out a bit I am applying for a customer service job in the gaming industry, and would be happy if someone could give me some feedback on my cover letter, since I have never written one in English before. I have removed some of the details about the job, and put in a description of it instead. [ ].


Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you to apply for the position of [name of the position], advertised on your website on the 29th of February 2008.

I found the job description very interesting, and I believe that I would be an ideal candidate for the following reasons:
I have worked within the field of customer service for more than 4 years. During this time I have gained experience on how to communicate with people. I had the responsibility for training and coaching employees, in addition to handling the most difficult customer inquiries. This has enabled me able to deliver information in a professional way, and to adjust this information to suit the individual needs of each customer.

I have a lot of experience serving as a link between customers, employees and clients (where? "at the above job"?); and being the person who had the information, or knew how to obtain the information, was the key part of my previous employment. I believe that my experience in handling the flow of information, and making it suitable for customers, could be of great use to you.

As a person I am very detail oriented and organized. I always set high standards for my work and I am not satisfied until those are achieved. I work well in a team, and I do not shy away from taking responsibility for any task at hand.

In addition to this, gaming is a hobby of mine and has been so for years. I spend a lot of time browsing different game related forums and websites, and I have experience as a forum moderator. I am a big fan of [company name] products and a very active [name of a game] player.

I see this job as an opportunity to combine my passion for working with people with my gaming hobby, and I would very much like to take on the challenge.
I have included my resume for more detailed information on my background.

Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon, and am available for an interview at whatever time is suitable for you. I can be contacted at the above at any time. (put your contact details at the top of the page)

Yours sincerely,
[my name]

Phew! :up:

 

[asfaloth100]

Thank you very much for your help!

 

[Batfink]

Let us know how you get on!