cover letter

[raphi]

Hi!
I'm applying for an internship position. I'm not sure if this paragraph is ok like this and I would be very grateful if somebody could correct it. Thank you in advance!

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Having this background, the XXX Programme seems highly attractive to me. An internship with XXX would provide me with the opportunity to learn more about security issues on the African continent. Most important, it would enable me to do so in an organisation in which Africa really takes the lead in promoting peace.
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[Anglika]

It is all grammatically correct, but I am not clear what you mean by: an organisation in which Africa really takes the lead in promoting peace

Could you explain what is meant?

 

[raphi]

Thank you very much for your reply!

Maybe the slogan of the organisation explains it best: "nothing for me without me". They encourage "african solutions" for african problems, not european solution. It's like the distinctive feature about this NGO and it's something I wanted to mention in my application, because it was one of the main reasons for me to apply there.

 

[susiedqq]

How about:

Most importantly, the internship would enable me to particpate with an organisation that promotes Africa taking the lead in promoting peace.
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