CVs and resume, welcome suggestion

[luka]

LUKA CHEN
Tel: (021) 5*****3, cell: 138******39
Room *** No.*** Lane **, Zhongtan Road. Shanghai, 200*** China
Email: luka0530@yahoo.com.cn

Shanghai xinxin sports development Co. Ltd
Add: F23, CenturyBa-shiMansion, 398HuaihaiZhongRoad,shanghai200020, China
Tel: (86-21) 63840934
Fax: (86-21) 63860871
E-mail: master@xinxinsports.com

October 16, 2004

Respected Madam or Sir:

Re: Application for secretary of chief match inspector

I will graduate from the Shanghai University, Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce with a 3 years degree in June of next year. My major is international trade and I am very interested in securing a position before I graduate, if possible.

I have long been hopeful of working for you after I graduate, because I consider you are the one of the finest company in Shanghai. I am sure that if I have the privilege of being an employee in your company, I will greatly increase my education and my experience while trying my best to do in the work team. Because I know that Xinxin Sports have undertaken Shanghai ATP, three WTA, F1 motor boat and so on, and will be the role of popularizing all matches to receive more world’s challenges. If you can give me the opportunity, then the company’s future means my future, I will truly work hard to be qualified the job. If not, please keep my name on your file, because I consider Xinxin sports has been the first choice in my mind.

I will be available during the weekdays in the morning for any interviews you may want to give, and hoping for your immediate reply.
Sincerely yours,

LUKA CHEN

My Resume

Luka Chen
School Shanghai University， Sydney Institute of Language and
Commerce.
Curriculum vitae Technological academy
Major International trade
Tel (021) 52****13 cell: 138******39
Email Luka0530@yahoo.com.cn
Postal Code 200***
Address Room*** No.***Lane**, Zhongtan Road, Shanghai

objective:
To obtain a challenging position in an experienced and innovative team
Education:
Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce (SILC), Shanghai University, Shanghai, China 2002-Present
BS in International Business
Got Scholarship in 2002-2003 semester.

Computer Abilitees
Skilled in use of Win 2000/NT, Office 2000,and computer hardware.

English Skills
Have a good command of both spoken and written English

Demonstrate CET-4

Workexperience ·OCTOBER-NOVERBER, 2003, Research company to do part-time job for some research·
JUNE-AUGEST, 2004 In Shanghai Pudun technology development Co. Ltd. do business relating to financial, healthcare

 

[Tdol]

Respected Madam/Sir:


I'd say

Dear Sir or Madam,
;-)

 

[Tdol]

objective:
To obtain a challenging position in an experienced team to make innovation team work

Objective- should be capitalised

You repeat 'team' in the sentence- why not try rephrasing it?

To obtain a challenging position in an experienced and innovative team. ;-)

 

[luka]

Thank you for giving advises. Your suggestions have helped me a lot.