David's car stalled

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Are my sentences grammatically correct?

David's car stalled, and he angrily got out and called to the passing drivers and flagged them down, but nobody stopped.
 

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Yes. They're fine.
 

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There are a lot of "and"s. I'd change the first one to a semi-colon or a full stop and change the second to a comma. I'd probably also say "tried to flag them down".
 

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The "try" is inherent in the definition of "flag down". When you flag down a motorist you are trying to get that person to stop.

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True but saying "he flagged down other motorists" suggests, to me, that they did stop.
 

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emsr2d2,

With respect, the last part of the sentence says, "nobody stopped." I think that makes "tried" redundant.
 

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Flagged down means stopping a car. You have to add tried to because he failed.
 

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Tarheel,

I think that when you are reading my sentence, you are thinking like an editor, while others are thinking like English teachers, and therefore they believe that "tried" is necessary. But I believe that if the above sentence were a part of a short story, a professional editor wouldn't add "tried."
 

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To me, it doesn't read right without tried to. If he had flagged down a car, it would have stopped. He tried - and failed - to flag down the passing cars.
 

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It might be better to say "He tried to get somebody to stop". However, context does make it clear what is meant.
 
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