Description of a monster

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The monster can make a low sound like a dog, a deep, long cry like a lion and a long, loud cry like a wolf.

Is the above descriptions grammatical?

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The words are okay but the punctuation isn't. When you write a list of things, and at least one entry in the list is a phrase containing a comma, you have to separate the entries with semicolons.

Can you see where you should put two semicolons in the sentence?
 

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The words are okay but the punctuation isn't. When you write a list of things, and at least one entry in the list is a phrase containing a comma, you have to separate the entries with semicolons.

Can you see where you should put two semicolons in the sentence?

The monster can make a low sound like a dog; a deep, long cry like a lion; and a long, loud cry like a wolf.

Am I right?
 

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I did not know the semi-colons can be used in a series. I thought commas would suffice when we are listing down a few items.
 

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The monster can make a low sound like a dog; a deep, long cry like a lion; and a long, loud cry like a wolf.

Am I right?

Yes.
 

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Lions roar. Wolves howl.
 

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... and a dog's 'low sound' is a growl.
 
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