Diana was taking selfies

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Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

Diana was taking selfies on the beach, indifferent of other people, who gaped at her attractive figure.
 

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I'd say 'indifferent to other people'.
 

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Her figure should be more than merely attractive to provoke gaping.
 

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Perhaps:

Diana, wearing a teeny tiny bikini, was taking selfies on the beach and ignoring those who chose to stare.
 

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I consider "indifferent of" incorrect in the above.
 
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