Difficult sentences to edit

[Anonymous]

Kindly indicate whether the folowing sentences are correct :-

1. There is plenty of parking and not that much traffic . OR

There is a plenty of parking space and the traffic flow is very little.

2. Does spending a meaningful day filled with fun with your
schoolmates at the peak of Mt. Kinabalu sound appealing to you ?

OR
Is the spending of a meaningful day filled with fun with your school
mates at the peak of Mt. Kinabalu sounds appealing to you ?

3. What were the objectives of the 2003 World Memory Championship
and do you feel that the objectives have been fulfilled over the past
three days in Singapore ?

OR
What were the objectives of the World Memory Championship and
do you think that the objectives had or were fulfilled over the past
three days in Singapore ?

NOTE : FOR THE ABOVE SENTENCE, WE WANT TO QUOTE WHAT THE PERSON HAD TOLD US DURING INTERVIEW .

4. For novices, do not be intimidated by the towering climbing wall, there are highly-qualified and skilled instructors who are ever ready and willing to share with you the proper climbing techniques and how to use the climbing equipment.

5. After a -45 pleasant journey by bus from Queenstown, another 3.49km journey by cable car to the top of the mountain at a maximum speed of 6 metres per second takes the students through a breathtaking view of well-preserved and verdant raintree forests from the skyline. Besides that , the movements of South East Asia's longest and world's fastest cable car provide the pragmatic science to the students.

6. Since September 2002 , the eco-tourism programme has attracted youngsters from 200 colleges .

OR
Since September 2002 , the eco-tourism programme attracted youths from 200 colleges.

7. As requested by you the other day, the following are the pertinent particulars for your record .

8. Did you benefit from playing football in any other way ? OR

Have you benefited in any other way from playing football ?

 

[RonBee]

There is plenty of parking and not that much traffic

OK

There is a plenty of parking space and the traffic flow is very little.

• There is a plenty of parking space and the traffic flow is very light.

Does spending a meaningful day filled with fun with your
schoolmates at the peak of Mt. Kinabalu sound appealing to you ?

It is a little awkward, but it is, I think, grammatical. Try:

• Does spending a meaningful, fun-filled day with your schoolmates at the peak of Mt. Kinabalu sound appealing to you?

Is the spending of a meaningful day filled with fun with your school mates at the peak of Mt. Kinabalu sounds appealing to you ?

No.

What were the objectives of the 2003 World Memory Championship and do you feel that the objectives have been fulfilled over the past three days in Singapore ?

That is good except I would put a comma after Championship, and you have left the QM out on its own.

NOTE : FOR THE ABOVE SENTENCE, WE WANT TO QUOTE WHAT THE PERSON HAD TOLD US DURING INTERVIEW .

Delete had there. Say the interview. Do not space before a period (full stop).

For novices, do not be intimidated by the towering climbing wall, there are highly-qualified and skilled instructors who are ever ready and willing to share with you the proper climbing techniques and how to use the climbing equipment.

• Do not be intimidated by the towering climbing wall. There are highly-qualified instructors who are ready and willing to explain the proper climbing techniques and tell you how to use the climbing equipment.

Or:

• To novices:
  
  Do not be intimidated by the towering climbing wall. There are highly- qualified instructors who are ready and willing to explain the proper climbing techniques and tell you how to use the climbing equipment.

After a -45 pleasant journey by bus from Queenstown, another 3.49km journey by cable car to the top of the mountain at a maximum speed of 6 metres per second takes the students through a breathtaking view of well-preserved and verdant raintree forests from the skyline.

• After a pleasant, 45km journey by bus from Queenstown, another 3.49km journey by cable car to the top of the mountain at a maximum speed of 6 metres per second takes the students to a place where there is a breath-taking view of a well-preserved rainforest.

Since September 2002 , the eco-tourism programme has attracted youngsters from 200 colleges .

Don't space before either a period or a comma.

Since September 2002 , the eco-tourism programme attracted youths from 200 colleges.

• Since September 2002 , the eco-tourism programme has attracted students from 200 colleges.

As requested by you the other day, the following are the pertinent particulars for your record .

• In response to your request, the following are the pertinent particulars for your record.

What are pertinent particulars?

Did you benefit from playing football in any other way ?

• Did you benefit from playing football in any other way?

Have you benefited in any other way from playing football ?

• Have you benefited in any other way from playing football?