During his illness, Peter lost

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I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct.

During his illness, Peter lost count of time. He fell in and out of consciousness, had a high fever and awful nightmares. When he pulled through, he looked more like a ghost than a human being.
 

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The second sentence has a parallelism error. Write He fell in and out of consciousness, had a high fever, and had terrible nightmares or He fell in and out of consciousness and had a high fever and terrible nightmares.
 

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I would use "lost track of time" and "lost count of how many times". Are you possibly inadvertently merging these two?
 

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teechar,
I simply did not remember the phrase "lost track of time" and used what I wrongly thought was a proper phrase.
 

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It's not standard, but I rather like it- a happy mistake.
 
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