experience differnet surroundings.

Status
Not open for further replies.

bosun

Senior Member
Joined
Nov 9, 2005
Member Type
Student or Learner
Native Language
Korean
Home Country
South Korea
Current Location
South Korea
Hi! I am trying to write a personnel statement for college admission and if you see any mistakes in the following sentence, can I have your feedback.

1.My mom had to move around many times due to her job, which gave me difficulties as well as opportunites to experience many different surroundings.

2.Moving too many palces was not easy for a young girl, but I made my situation into a benefit by using my adapting ability and friendliess in dealing with people.
 

TheParser

VIP Member
Joined
Dec 8, 2009
Member Type
Other
Native Language
English
Home Country
United States
Current Location
United States
Hi! I am trying to write a personnel statement for college admission and if you see any mistakes in the following sentence, can I have your feedback.

1.My mom had to move around many times due to her job, which gave me difficulties as well as opportunites to experience many different surroundings.

2.Moving too many palces was not easy for a young girl, but I made my situation into a benefit by using my adapting ability and friendliess in dealing with people.

********** NOT A TEACHER **********

Hello, Bosun.

(1) Maybe something like:

It was difficult moving from place to place because of my

mother's job, but I found it to be a wonderful and exciting opportunity

to experience new and different surroundings.




Although constantly moving around was hard on a young girl,

I learned that I could turn a challenging situation into a success

by being friendly with people and eagerly adapting myself to

changing conditions.

Thank you

P. S. Good luck!!!
 
Status
Not open for further replies.
Top