First when Peter hit the bottom with his head

Bassim

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I am wondering if my sentence is grammatically correct. Is it correct to start this sentence with "first"?

First when Peter hit the bottom with his head, he thought that, after all, it was not a good idea to jump into the shallow river.
 

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When Peter's head hit the river bed he realised that it hadn't been a good idea to dive into the shallow river.

If he "jumped" in, it suggests he went in feet first, making it unlikely that he would hit his head. Going into the water head first requires "dive".
 
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