Five years after a massive earthquake

Bassim

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Are my sentences grammatically correct?

Fiver years after a massive earthquake hit the town, its traces were still visible: the derelict buildings left to decay, crumbling walls, cracks in facades, and piles of debris on the outskirts.
 

Tarheel

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I would say a major earthquake. Also I would say there were piles of debris outside town.
 

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Great vocabulary use, Bassim!

Are my sentences grammatically correct?

Fiver years after a massive earthquake hit the town, its traces were still visible: the derelict buildings left to decay, crumbling walls, cracks in facades, and piles of debris on the outskirts.

I would say:

Five years after a massive earthquake hit the town, traces of the devastation remained: the derelict buildings left to decay, crumbling walls, cracks in facades. Beyond the town were piles of debris.

WHY? 'its traces were still visible' - not clear if you mean traces of the earthquake or traces of the town
If the piles of debris are the only element that is on the outskirts of the town (and the derelict buildings are elsewhere) it makes more sense to separate these elements.
 

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Five years after an earthquake hit town you could still see evidence of it: cracks in buildings and piles of rubble.
 
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