Formal letter CAE writing test

[Alicecr]

Hello everyone!

I'm preparing myself for the CAE test and I need some help with the writing part because I don't have anyone here to correct my essays. Please could you guys have a look? :roll:

Thanks in advanced.

This is the beginning of my formal letter:

Dear Sir,
I am writing with regard to your article "Host Families in the Dark", which appeared in last Saturday's edition. I would like to make it clear to readers that comments made are not true to all language schools in Easton.

Firstly, the view of the poor relations between students and host families is clearly not true of Midtown College, where I am the secretary. Moreover, the reason why our students are barely at home is because they are always doing things.....

 

[Gillnetter]

Hello everyone!

I'm preparing myself for the CAE test and I need some help with the writing part because I don't have anyone here to correct my essays. Please could you guys have a look? :roll:

Thanks in [STRIKE]advanced[/STRIKE] advance ("advanced" is to move forward).

This is the beginning of my formal letter:

Dear Sir,
I am writing with regard to your article "Host Families in the Dark", which appeared in last Saturday's edition. I would like to make it clear to readers that comments made are not true [STRIKE]to [/STRIKE] about all language schools in Easton.
(I'm not sure of how you can make anything clear to the readers. You could write, "I would like for you to make it clear...", or, "I would like to make it clear that the comments...".)

Firstly, the view of the poor relations between students and host families is clearly not true of Midtown College, where I am the secretary. Moreover, the reason why our students are barely (I would prefer "hardly ever at home". To be very correct, this is not their home, it is the home of their hosts. "hardly ever at their lodging" seems to work better) at home is because they are always doing things.....

Gil

 

[Alicecr]

I really appreciate your time. All these corrections are very useful.

Thank you very much! ;-)