Gina wanted to visit her mother in hospital

[Bassim]

I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct. I am not sure if my second sentence sounds natural.

Gina wanted to visit her mother in hospital, but her mother flatly refused her. She told her that when she didn't deign to visit her when she was healthy, she shouldn't bother to come now when she was ill.

 

[teechar]

I would merge the two sentences, e.g.:

Gina wanted to visit her mother in hospital, but her mother flatly refused to see her [STRIKE]. She told her that when she didn't deign[/STRIKE] because Gina had never bothered to visit her when she was healthy. [STRIKE], she shouldn't bother to come now when she was ill.[/STRIKE]

 

[emsr2d2]

You could end the first sentence/clause with the word "refused".

 

[Bassim]

Thank you again emsr2d2,

I have been asking myself if I could end my sentence with "refused," and again, I see you have posted your reply on the question which was on my mind.