Gina went to France on holiday

[Bassim]

I am wondering if my sentences are grammatically correct.

Gina went to France on holiday. She called her mother, who told her if she did not come back with some tasty French cakes and pastries she would not come in. "Don't worry, I'll bring some wine, too," Gina said.

 

[GoesStation]

The second sentence doesn't make sense. Do you mean that Gina wouldn't be welcome at her mother's house? If so, you need could, not would, and you need to change the words following that verb.

 

[Bassim]

Gina would not be welcome, but her mother was not serious, of course. The problem is I couldn't express myself better.
Should I write like this instead:

She called her mother, who told her if she did not come back with some tasty French cakes and pastries she couldn't come inside the house.

 

[GoesStation]

That's OK.

 

[emsr2d2]

Or "... if she didn't come back with cakes and pastries, she wouldn't be allowed in/allowed to come into the house"

 

[Tdol]

How about she wouldn't let her in/through the door?

 

[teechar]

Bassim, don't forget to use a comma after the conditional clause if that comes first.