Grammar and punctuation suggestions

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Over the past several decades, researchers have described a variety models to describe the instructional quality or the factors that determine school learning.

Caroll (1963), who defined school learning as a function of time spent divided by the time needed.
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Caroll (1963) proposed the first such model and described school learning as a function of time spent divided by the time needed.
 

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Hello there, and welcome. :)
Over the past several decades, researchers have [STRIKE]described[/STRIKE] developed a variety of models to describe the instructional quality or the factors that determine school learning.
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Remove "who" from the second sentence.
I'm not sure what the second and third sentences mean.
 

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I'm still looking for a question.
 
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