Grammar errors

[bmo]

PLease check if these sentences are alright.

1. The Principle diverted out tuition to his personal use - a family pilgramage to Mecca.

2. Owing to the commander's diversion strategy, we averted a total defeat.

3. Beginning in September, the University will revert to the semester academic system.

Please pay attention tothe caps, Principle and University.

How would you have said them?

Thanks a million.

BMO

 

[Tdol]

1. The Principle diverted out tuition to his personal use - a family pilgramage to Mecca.
The Principal diverted tuition fees for his personal use- a family pilgrimage to Mecca.

2. Owing to the commander's diversion strategy, we averted a total defeat.

diversionary
you could say 'Commander' if youwanted to
3. Beginning in September, the University will revert to the semester academic system.
I'd be tempted to use 'from September'
;-)

 

[bmo]

Thanks. I posted twice by mistake.

BMO

 

[theschnitzel]

PLease check if these sentences are alright.

By the way, "alright" is only used when referring to something's satisfaction. Like:

Was it good?
It was alright.

Do you wanna go to the movies?
Alright.

But when you're referring to if something is totally complete or all correct. Then you use "all right," as in your sentence above.

Please check [to see] if these sentences are all right.

 

[bmo]

i think you are right, thanks. BMO