Grammar errors

[bmo]

Are the following ok??

1. The Principle diverted our tuition to his personal use - a family pilgramage to Mecca.

2. Owing to the commander's diversion strategy, we averted a total defeat.

3. Beginning in September, the University will revert to the semester academic system.

Should University and Principle be capitalized?

Thanks a million.

BMO

 

[Casiopea]

Are the following ok??

1. The Principle diverted our tuition to his personal use - a family pilgramage to Mecca.

a) A principal is your "pal" (i.e., friend). Note the spelling. :wink:
b) diverted sounds odd to me in that context
c) The symbol " - " should be two, like this " -- "
d) I don't get the connection: --a family....
e) pilgrims go on pilgrimages. Note the spelling :wink:

2. Owing to the commander's diversion strategy, we averted a total defeat.

a) What about, just diversion? Strategy is implied.
b) I'd change averted to escaped. But that's just me.

3. Beginning in September, the University will revert to the semester academic system.

What about, just the semester system? Academic is implied by the word "University".

Should University and Principle be capitalized?

If it refers to a specific person's title or name, it should be capitalized. That is, if you know who/what you are talking about, then capitalize the word:

The Principal (Specific person at our school)
The University (Specific place)

The principal in a school should... (I don't know the person's name)
The university down the road... (I don't know the university's name)

 

[bmo]

Thanks Cas, Ok now?

1. The Principal diverted our tuition into his personal accounts. He was caught when he tried to use the money to finance his family pilgrimage to Mecca.

2. Owing to the commander's diversion, we averted a total defeat.

3. Beginning in September, the University will revert to the semester system.

Thanks.

BMO

 

[Casiopea]

Thanks Cas, Ok now?

1. The Principal diverted our tuition into his personal accounts. He was caught when he tried to use the money to finance his family pilgrimage to Mecca.

2. Owing to the commander's diversion, we averted a total defeat.

3. Beginning in September, the University will revert to the semester system.

Thanks.

BMO

1. diverted our tuition still strikes me as odd. Sorry.
2. averted a total defeat sounds odd to me too. Sorry.

 

[bmo]

I think I see it now. Divert the scholarship fund would have been better. It is not the word, divert, that makes it look funny, it is tuition.

Prevent a total defeat would be better.

Thanks.

BMO

 

[Casiopea]

I think I see it now. Divert the scholarship fund would have been better. It is not the word, divert, that makes it look funny, it is tuition.

Prevent a total defeat would be better.

Thanks.

BMO

Looks great! 8)

You're welcome.