Hannah had put on make-up

[Bassim]

Are my sentences grammatically correct?

Hanna had put on make-up and got a new hairdo, but Tim hardly looked at her.

"What's wrong with you?" she asked.
"A bird told me you are seeing someone?" he said.
"Me?" She snorted. "I'm loyal and faithful like a dog."

 

[emsr2d2]

Are my sentences grammatically correct.

Hanna had put on make-up and got a new hairdo, but Tim hardly looked at her.

"What's wrong with you?", she asked.
"A little bird told me you are seeing someone"​, he said.
"Me?", she snorted. "I'm as loyal and faithful [STRIKE]like[/STRIKE] as a dog."

Above is how I would write it.

 

[Bassim]

emsr2d2,
With respect, regarding my last sentence "Me?", she snorted." I think that a comma after a question mark is redundant. At least that is what I see when I am reading fiction.

 

[Barb_D]

There are different styles regarding some aspects of punctuation.

I would not have used a comma in the first or third line of dialogue, and in the US, you'd write "are seeing someone," he said.

I also would use the lower-case "she" and make the other corrections.

(Don't forget your question mark in your lead-off sentence. )

 

[Bassim]

Barb_D

This is from the Best Punctuation Book, by June Casegrande.

"Question Mark to Replace a Comma


A quotation that ends with a question mark is not followed by a comma.
Right: “Are the sandwiches good here?” he asked."
Wrong: “Are the sandwiches good here?,” he asked.

I usually follow the rule above because you don't need to add a comma after a question mark.

 

[GoesStation]

This is from the Best Punctuation Book, by June Casegrande.

"Question Mark to Replace a Comma


A quotation that ends with a question mark is not followed by a comma.
Right: “Are the sandwiches good here?” he asked."
Wrong: “Are the sandwiches good here?,” he asked.

I usually follow the rule above because you don't need to add a comma after a question mark.

You should never put a comma immediately after a question mark. Some style guides may still require one after a closing quotation mark even if the quoted sentence ends in a question mark, but I wouldn't use one there.

British and American publishers follow different punctuation rules regarding quotations, with broad agreement on each side of the Atlantic but many variations within each group.