Hannah has been promised promotion

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Are my sentences grammatically correct?

Hannah has been promised promotion by her boss, but her colleague Linda told her not to deceive herself. She was promised promotion also by the same man who intended to have sex with her in return.
 

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Are my sentences grammatically correct?

Hannah has been promised a promotion by her boss, but her colleague Linda told her not to deceive herself. She was also promised a promotion (delete also) by the same man who intended to have sex with her in return.
It's all a little unclear. Did Hannah get offers from two different supervisors? I'm wondering how two different people can offer a promotion to the same employee.

Or - is the She in the second sentence Linda? Then you need a comma after by the same man, and you need to clarify who She is.
 

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I would have suggested the same corrections as Charlie B, but I didn't find it at all unclear, myself. The fact that it was the same man in the second sentence seems to dispel any possible misunderstanding.
 

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I think that my sentence is clear. I don't understand how could you understand that it was about two different men? My sentence says, " She was also promised a promotion by the same man..." There is no need to clarify anything because the sentence is clear as it is. Both Hannah and Linda were promised a promotion by the same man. Linda warned Hanna not to trust her boss because he also promised Linda a promotion and wanted to have sex in return.
 
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