Hannah inherited a set of expensive gold-rimmed

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Are my sentences grammatically correct?

Hannah inherited a set of expensive, gold-rimmed cups from her grandmother. She had never used them and kept them locked in a china cabinet. When the earthquake hit the town and wrought destruction, she sorrowed her broken cups more than her destroyed home.
 

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Although "sorrow" is listed as a verb in dictionaries, I've never heard or seen it used that way. I'd say something like "... she was more upset about her broken cups than ...".
 

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The first sentence should use the past perfect.
 

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Although "sorrow" is listed as a verb in dictionaries, I've never heard or seen it used that way. I'd say something like "... she was more upset about her broken cups than ...".

How about:
.. she grieved over her broken cups more than her destroyed home?
It is a stronger word used commonly enough.

 

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I think 'mourned for' is even stronger.
 

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I think "mourning",which means "the outward manifestation of grief", is not appropriate in the context.
 

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I think "mourning",which means "the outward manifestation of grief", is not appropriate in the context.

Why? She might have been sobbing in the street with the fragments of cups in her hand, for all we know.
 

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Why? She might have been sobbing in the street with the fragments of cups in her hand, for all we know.

We are talking about an equivalent word to "sorrowed".
 

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'Sorrow' does not rule out the outward manifestation of grief.
'Mourn' does not necessarily mean the outward manifestation of grief.
 

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How about lamented the loss of her cups?
 

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Are my sentences grammatically correct?

Hannah had inherited a set of expensive, gold-rimmed cups from her grandmother. She had never used them and kept them locked in a china cabinet. When an earthquake hit the town and wrought destruction, she was more upset about her broken cups than her destroyed home.
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